Read these sentences from Yasmin's essay. Nazario believes that Central American children like Enrique who come to the United States today are refugees and should be treated that way. If they were, she says, such children would not repeatedly have to face the dangers of migration, which bring tears to my eyes. Which word or phrase should Yasmin revise to eliminate informal and subjective language? "believes" "come to" "the dangers of migration" "which bring tears to my eyes"

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Adriana Mccarty

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7 January, 13:32

Read these sentences from Yasmin's essay. Nazario believes that Central American children like Enrique who come to the United States today are refugees and should be treated that way. If they were, she says, such children would not repeatedly have to face the dangers of migration, which bring tears to my eyes. Which word or phrase should Yasmin revise to eliminate informal and subjective language? "believes" "come to" "the dangers of migration" "which bring tears to my eyes"

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Talia Mueller · Answer 1

Talia Mueller 7 January, 13:35

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D. which bring tears to my eyes

Penelope Warren · Answer 2

The phrase that Yasmin should revise to eliminate informal and subjective language is "which bring tears to my eyes".

By using that phrase, Yasmin is not being objective. Moreover, she is referring to the emotional effect that Nazario's words have had on her, which is not relevant nor appropriate information for an essay. Furthermore, "which bring tears to my eyes" is an informal phrase; therefore, that is another reason why it should be eliminated. Only formal language should be used when working on an academic piece of writing.