Have you read the story "The Monkey's Paw?" I have. I enjoyed it tremendously! It was creepy and suspenseful. It was heartbreaking for the White family. It taught a valuable lesson. I highly recommend it! What is wrong with sentence fluency in this paragraph?

It is choppy and there are too many periods (which makes it choppy).

Each sentence ends abruptly, that's all I know.

Hope I was of use, have a great day!

Cheers,

This paragraph contains all the right information, but it is not conveyed in the most appropriate way. In this text, we see that each sentence ends abruptly. The sentences are too short, and there are not enough transition words. Therefore, the sentences do not flow easily, and it is likely that the reader would find this writing unenjoyable or unappealing.