Can someone tell me if this makes sense?

The central idea of this article is to communicate to reader the unequal pay of the U. S soccer team. Throughout the years the U. S. soccer team has been getting payed a substantially lower amount than the men's. The article states that "each played 20 exhibition games a year, men could earn an average of $263,320 each. Meanwhile, women players could earn a maximum of $99,000 each." showing the numbers that prove that the team gets lower pay and even with more credibility the team has still not been shown any back pay " winning three World Cups, and U. S. Soccer over their compensation and treatment compared with the men's team, which has accomplished far less, never winning a world title and failing to qualify for the 2018 World Cup."

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Luciana Berry

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15 May, 10:12

Can someone tell me if this makes sense?

The central idea of this article is to communicate to reader the unequal pay of the U. S soccer team. Throughout the years the U. S. soccer team has been getting payed a substantially lower amount than the men's. The article states that "each played 20 exhibition games a year, men could earn an average of $263,320 each. Meanwhile, women players could earn a maximum of $99,000 each." showing the numbers that prove that the team gets lower pay and even with more credibility the team has still not been shown any back pay " winning three World Cups, and U. S. Soccer over their compensation and treatment compared with the men's team, which has accomplished far less, never winning a world title and failing to qualify for the 2018 World Cup."

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William · Answer 1

you need to add some commas and you need to add "the" in front of reader

The second sentence doesn't make sense.

Explanation:

I would suggest using Grammarly and proof reading your work at least 3 times out loud.