Jeffrey Blankenship

English

26 February, 18:27

While the wind blew leaves off the trees, rain fell and thunder sounded.

Clark decided to rewrite the sentence as follows:

While the gusting wind ripped leaves off the trees, rain poured and thunder clapped.

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Read this sentence from a paragraph Clark wrote describing a thunderstorm. Was Clark correct in making this revision?

A) yes, because the new sentence adds vivid language

B) yes, because the new sentence is longer than the first sentence

C) no, because the new sentence may be too long for some of the readers

D) no, because the new sentence uses words that readers may not understand