Read these sentences from a student's draft.

Which revision is the best example of adding concrete

details?

Abc

The firefighters went to the wrong place. It took them too

long.

O The firefighters responded when "shouts of 'Fire!'

were heard" (Murphy 33). They were quick to arrive

but had already wasted time.

Tired and unsteady, the firefighters were not

prepared for the job. It took a while.

O A signal mistake cost time because "dozens of

firefighters were sent on a wild-goose chase"

(Murphy 33).

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Jefferson Ramirez

English

16 April, 01:55

Read these sentences from a student's draft.

Which revision is the best example of adding concrete

details?

Abc

The firefighters went to the wrong place. It took them too

long.

O The firefighters responded when "shouts of 'Fire!'

were heard" (Murphy 33). They were quick to arrive

but had already wasted time.

Tired and unsteady, the firefighters were not

prepared for the job. It took a while.

O A signal mistake cost time because "dozens of

firefighters were sent on a wild-goose chase"

(Murphy 33).

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Itzel Benson · Answer 1

hey were quick to arrive

but had already wasted time.

Tired and unsteady, the firefighters were not

prepared for the job. It took a while.

O A signal mistake cost time because "dozens of

firefighters were sent on a wild-goose chase"

(Murphy 33).