Read the passage. The Star Trek character Spock is the son of a human mother and a Vulcan father. He finds himself torn between his emotional human side and his logical Vulcan side. This conflict gives his character depth and dimension. Which revision would make the writing flow more smoothly? Eventually, he finds himself torn between his emotional human side and his logical Vulcan side. As a result, he finds himself torn between his emotional human side and his logical Vulcan side. However, he finds himself torn between his emotional human side and his logical Vulcan side. In addition, he finds himself torn between his emotional human side and his logical Vulcan side.

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Cale Stafford

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22 October, 13:54

Read the passage. The Star Trek character Spock is the son of a human mother and a Vulcan father. He finds himself torn between his emotional human side and his logical Vulcan side. This conflict gives his character depth and dimension. Which revision would make the writing flow more smoothly? Eventually, he finds himself torn between his emotional human side and his logical Vulcan side. As a result, he finds himself torn between his emotional human side and his logical Vulcan side. However, he finds himself torn between his emotional human side and his logical Vulcan side. In addition, he finds himself torn between his emotional human side and his logical Vulcan side.

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Christine Erickson · Answer 1

I believe that since you stated at the beginning that he's half human half Vulcan, it flows better when using "As a result" at the beginning of the next sentence. This is because his being torn is resulting from his mixed heritage.